Writing Experiences
Instructions:-
1. Rewrite the following essays. Correct all errors in capitalization, spelling, and punctuation. Divide the passage into appropriate paragraphs.
#1
When my husband Joe had cancer surgery five years ago, each of his family members responded just as I knew they would. John, his father, decided to organize the family’s calls. Because, of course, everything would run so much more smoothly. Thus Jane, Matt, and Jim received detailed sheets of instructions in the mail. Telling them which days to telephone r.j. smith hospital to talk to Joe and what presents to send. Jane, enraged, promptly threw a tantrum. Calling Matt and me to complain about her father’s overbearing behavior. “I,” she yelled, “am a Psychiatrist who knows how to handle these situations, i am not still a child.” Matt also responded predictably. By avoiding the situation. He threw himself into his work. Normally a late sleeper, Matt took to leaving at 5:00 a.m., driving on the deserted expressway and arriving at work before six a.m. In addition, he didn’t return until 11:00 p.m. When he would fall into bed so exhausted that he couldn’t worry about Joe. Jim, too, responded predictably. He fumed inside for weeks, ignored John’s instructions, and sent cartons of books to Joe. So that he would never be bored. The books were funny. Because Jim had read Norman Cousins’ book about the healing power of laughter. Within a few months, Joe recovered from the surgery-in spite of his family
#2
Treatment of atrial septal defect depends upon the size and symptoms and therefore is individualized an atrial septal defect of less than 3mm usually closes spontaneously (The Merck Manual, 2006). When the defect is between 3mm and 8mm it closes spontaneously in eighty percent of cases by the age of eighteen months, however, atrial septal defects located in the anteroinferior aspect of the septum (ostium primum) or in the posterior aspect of the septum near the superior vena cava or inferior vena cava (sinus venosus) don’t close spontaneously. If the defect is very small does not close spontaneously and the patient is asymptomatic. The treatment may be simply too monitor via an annual echocardiogram. Of course their is a risk of patients’ becoming symptomatic.
Moderate-sized atrial septal defects or larger or patients’ who are symptomatic require closure of the shunt this is usually done between the ages of 2 and 6 years. A catheter-delivered closure device, such as Amplatzer Septal Occluder or Cardio-Seal device. May be used for closure of atrial septal defects less than 13mm in size, except than primum or sinus venosus defects. If the defect is greater than thirteen milimeters or located near important structures. Surgical repair becomes necessary. If the atrial septal defect is repaired during childhood there mortality rates approach 0 and the patient’s life expectancy approaches that of the general population prior to surgical repair, patients may need to be treated with diuretics; digoxin; ACE inhibitor; or beta blockers to prevent congestive heart failure (Moser & Riegel, 2007). Following surgical repair patience will receive aspirin to prevent clots, and be monitored closely for dysrhythmias and pulmonary hypertension. Oxygen and nitric oxide therapy have proven to be beneficial in treating postoperative pulmonary hypertension. Also patients who have primum atrial septal defect will need endocarditis prophylaxis.
2 .Guided writing exercise:
Think about a recent experience you have had that required you to use critical thinking skills. Set a timer for five minutes. Write about your experience. Do not worry about grammar, punctuation, or spelling. Just write, but stop at five minutes. Now go back and write your experience with correct grammar, punctuation, and spelling. Submit both written pieces. Add a concluding paragraph that answers the follows questions: How was the formal writing experience different from the timed writing experience? What did you do differently? Was there any difference in the time it took you? How did you ensure your spelling, grammar, and punctuation were correct?
3. Describe when the following words would be used in a scholarly essay. Then, use those that are appropriate to a scholarly essay in a sentence.
Solution
Writing Experiences
Timed Writing Experience 1
When my husband Joe had cancer surgery five years ago, each of his family members responded just as I knew they would. John, his father, decided to organize the family’s calls. Because, of course, everything would run so much more smoothly. Thus Jane, Matt, and Jim received detailed sheets of instructions in the mail. Telling them which days to telephone r.j. smith hospital to talk to Joe and what presents to send. Jane, enraged, promptly threw a tantrum. Calling Matt and me to complain about her father’s overbearing behavior. “I,” she yelled, “am a Psychiatrist who knows how to handle these situations, i am not still a child.” Matt also responded predictably. By avoiding the situation. He threw himself into his work. Normally a late sleeper, Matt took to leaving at 5:00 a.m., driving on the deserted expressway and arriving at work before six a.m. In addition, he didn’t return until 11:00 p.m. When he would fall into bed so exhausted that he couldn’t worry about Joe. Jim, too, responded predictably. He fumed inside for weeks, ignored John’s instructions, and sent cartons of books to Joe. So that he would never be bored. The books were funny. Because Jim had read Norman Cousins’ book about the healing power of laughter. Within a few months, Joe recovered from the surgery-in spite of his family
Formal Writing Experience 1
When my husband Joe had cancer surgery five years ago, each of his family members responded just as I knew they would. John, his father, decided to organize the family’s calls. Because, of course, everything would run so much more smoothly. Thus Jane, Matt, and Jim received detailed sheets of instructions in the mail. Telling them which days to telephone R.J. Smith hospital to talk to Joe and the presents that they should send. Jane, having being enraged, promptly threw a tantrum. She called Matt and I to complain about her father’s overbearing behavior. “I,” she yelled, “am a psychiatrist who knows how to handle these situations, I am not still a child.” Matt also responded predictably by avoiding the situation. Hw he handles it was by throwing himself into his work. Normally a late sleeper, Matt took to leaving at 5:00 a.m., driving on the deserted expressway and arriving at work before six a.m. In addition to that, he didn’t return until 11:00 p.m. Due to arriving this late, he would fall into bed so exhausted that he wouldn’t worry about Joe. Jim too responded predictably. He fumed inside for weeks, ignored John’s instructions, and sent cartons of books to Joe so that he would never be bored. The books were funny because Jim had read Norman cousin’s book about the healing power of laughter. Within a few months, Joe recovered from the surgery in spite of his family’s actions.
Timed Writing Experience 2
Treatment of atrial septal defect depends upon
the size and symptoms and therefore is individualized an atrial septal defect
of less than 3mm usually closes spontaneously (The Merck Manual, 2006). When
the defect is between 3mm and 8mm it closes spontaneously in eighty percent of
cases by the age of eighteen months, however, atrial septal defects located in
the anteroinferior aspect of the septum (ostium primum) or in the posterior
aspect of the septum near the superior vena cava or inferior vena cava (sinus
venosus) don’t close spontaneously. If the defect is very small does not close
spontaneously and the patient is asymptomatic. The treatment may be simply too
monitor via an annual echocardiogram. Of course their is a risk of patients’
becoming symptomatic.
Moderate-sized atrial septal defects or larger
or patients’ who are symptomatic require closure of the shunt this is usually
done between the ages of 2 and 6 years. A catheter-delivered closure device,
such as Amplatzer Septal Occluder or Cardio-Seal device. May be used for
closure of atrial septal defects less than 13mm in size, except than primum or
sinus venosus defects. If the defect is greater than thirteen milimeters or
located near important structures. Surgical repair becomes necessary. If the atrial septal defect is repaired during
childhood there mortality rates approach 0 and the patient’s life expectancy
approaches that of the general population prior to surgical repair, patients
may need to be treated with diuretics; digoxin; ACE inhibitor; or beta blockers
to prevent congestive heart failure (Moser & Riegel, 2007).
Following surgical repair patience will receive aspirin to prevent clots, and
be monitored closely for dysrhythmias and pulmonary hypertension. Oxygen and
nitric oxide therapy have proven to be beneficial in treating postoperative
pulmonary hypertension. Also patients who have primum atrial septal defect will
need endocarditis prophylaxis.
Formal Writing Experience 2
The treatment of atrial septal defect depends
on the signs and symptoms exhibited by a patient. Therefore, the
individualization of an atrial septal defect of less than 3mm usually closes
spontaneously (Beers &
Merck Research Laboratories., 2006). When the defect is between 3mm and 8mm it closes spontaneously. In eighty percent
of cases by the age of eighteen months, however, atrial septal defects located
in the anterior-inferior aspect of the septum (ostium primum) or in the posterior aspect of the septum near the superior vena
cava or inferior vena cava (sinus venosus)
don’t close spontaneously. If the defect is very
small, the vena cava does not close spontaneously
and the patient is declared to be asymptomatic. The treatment may be simply to
monitor via an annual echocardiogram. Of course,
there is a risk of patients becoming symptomatic.
Moderate-sized atrial septal defects or larger
patients who are symptomatic require the closure
of the shunt. This is usually done between the ages of 2 to 6
years. A catheter-delivered closure device, such as Amplatzer Septal Occluder
or Cardio-Seal device. May be used for
closure of atrial septal defects less than 13mm in size, except than primum or sinus venous
defects. If the defect is greater than
thirteen millimeters or located near important structures, surgical repair becomes
necessary. If the atrial septal defect is
repaired during childhood, their mortality rates approach 0 and the patient’s
life expectancy approaches that of the general population prior to surgical
repair, patients may need to be treated with diuretics; digoxin; ACE inhibitor;
or beta-blockers to prevent congestive heart failure (Moser & Riegel, 2008). Following surgical repair, patients will
receive aspirin to prevent clots, and be monitored closely for dysrhythmias and
pulmonary hypertension. Oxygen and Nitric
oxide therapy have proven to be beneficial in treating postoperative pulmonary
hypertension. Also patients who have primum atrial septal defect will need
endocarditis prophylaxis.
Conclusion
The timed writing experience was laced with more errors than the formal
writing experience. In both cases, it is evident that the grammar involved in
writing the two scenarios differed considerably. The main reason for this is
that when the writing was timed, the
thoughts being listed on paper were released too fast such that putting them
down on paper resulted in errors being formed. The analytical aspect was therefore lacking in the process. When
writing formally, the time to analyze the writing becomes more hence one can be
more cautious in the way that he/she writes. Formal writing therefore takes longer than timed writing since the person
writing becomes more engaged in delivering correct work. Correct grammar was ensured through the
thorough rereading of the texts to correct any grammatical errors.
References
Beers, M. H., & Merck Research Laboratories. (2006). The Merck manual of diagnosis and therapy. (18th ed. /). Whitehouse Station N.J.: Merck Research Laboratories.
Moser, D. K., & Riegel, B. (2008). Cardiac nursing : a companion to Braunwald’s heart disease. Saunders/Elsevier.
